Hello,
Could I have please have a review of my stage 1 application? I am applying as a business route .
MC
My job as a Customer success manager driving revenue and growth at IBM. This showcases all the projects that I worked on using the latest technology by driving revenue each month through build and generating new opportunities for other software products.
Stocks in all three companies that I worked for which were given because of my performance.
My job as a customer success manager at Informatica where I drove the adaption of Data management software products and generating additional revenue opportunities.
A two person interview that I did for a Masters project on adaption of O Ran technologies.
OC 2
My ongoing mentoring at wavemakers for University students to do a prototype of website/ mobile applications for a United nations sustanability goal with 2 cohorts since 2023.
Guest lectures on latest technologies for two universities since 2022.
Volunteered for a industry collaboration between IBM and a University in the UK for technology projects for their masters final coursework
Mentoring over adp list to young students and professionals on technology careers
Mentoring to two start ups ( software companies) on how to enter middle east markets
OC 3
Working as an inside sales and developing a new market in saudi arabia by cold calling and generating leads and managing renewals. A
Working on product improvement by understanding adaption risks at IBM and INformatica, documenting the risks, creating jira/ aha product feature requests, and communcting to product team to include the feature requests as part of the release process.
Hi @jrod, Well done! There are 11 documents, so you’ll need to remove one because the maximum is 10. I’ll advise that you find two mentorship opportunities in OC2.
Some thoughts
MC:
I don’t know if the two-person interview is strong enough (maybe because I don’t understand what it means clearly, so you may need to explain further).
Also, I’ve seen a lot of back and forth with proof of compensation as MC, so I’ll advise that when you apply with the stocks, you add salary growth, etc. At least, that’s how I did mine when I applied.
OC2
Add the two mentorship opportunities with students - i.e. 1 and 4 together. I’ve been told that TN doesn’t appreciate unstructured mentorship programs, so it’s better off as secondary evidence.
Also, your work with OC2 is a bit different from your MC work as a Customer Success Manager.
OC3
It looks good but seems a bit different from MC, too, but please ensure you demonstrate the impact of the work and the result.
@stevefrankie Thank you so much for reviewing this. I will make the necessary changes on your feedback. On OC3, Its true that its different from OC1 since I was in Sales for sometime before joining as a customer success manager in 2022. Again, I highly appreciate your feedback.
The mandatory criteria is weak as it does not show you have been recognized as a leader. Just providing evidence relating to your day job and salary evidence is not enough.
Volunteering for IBM related activity doesnt meet OC2. ADP list mentoring is not considered a structured programme as it does have a selection criteria.
Thank you @Francisca_Chiedu for your feedback. On MC1, I am trying for Exceptional promise and not exceptional talent. Do you think my evidence is still not sufficient. In my personal statement, I will mention that I aim to be exceptional talent through industry contributions in the future. ? On OC2, I will move IBM activity to OC3 since it was impact at work .
